After receiving a round of rejections, I decided to set this story on the backburner for awhile. After thinking on it for awhile, I decided that the weakness lay in the narration. It was a vague letter, with no salutation, and often no sense that the mermaid was talking to anyone in particular.
So in this draft, I rehauled the entire thing, and doubled down on it being epistolary. As the mermaid recounts events, she passes judgment on her younger self. The result is a more emotional story.
Now I need to polish it up, and then I’ll send it back out.
- Started June 18
- Finished June 19
- 485 words (97.8% of v 2)