I got a comment on my last draft that the beginning felt rushed and didn’t draw the reader in to the POV or world. This is a weakness of my writing, and on rereading the story, I completely agreed. So, I did another rehaul, showing the interesting parts of the world right up front. I also focused on the characters in order to show their motivation for doing what they were doing.
I made so many changes, adding so much new stuff, that I’ll probably refine it more before sending it off again. Whether that’s a major or a minor draft, I don’t know. But I do like where it’s going.
- Started May 13, 2015
- Finished May 19, 2015
- 2,555 words
- 163% the size of v 4
- Amount of Spanish: 6 words, 5 phrases.